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shabo the real man (part 1)
« on: November 11, 2015, 04:11:16 pm »




Subah ka time tha... hum sab bahen bhai nashta ker chukay thay... Ami kitchen m thi or abu dukan per ja chuke thay... Sab ko school Jane ki jaldi thi... Koi apni uniform hath m liye ghom raha tha to kisi k hath main kunkhi thi jes se woh apne bal sanwar raha tha

Main bhi apna bag pack ker raha tha keh baji meri bugal m aa ker khadi ho gai... Main ne baji ki terf dekha to Baji mujhe bazoo se paked ker kumre k ik kone m li gai or boli keh usay mujh se Koi baat kerni hay

Main chup chap baji k sath aa giya or apna ser utha ker us ki terf dekhne luga... Baji pershan nazer aa rahi thi or kisi kushmakush ka shikar thi.. Baji kuch bolnay k liye apna monh kholti liken phir chup ho jati

Main sawaliya nazron se baji k chehre ki terf dekh raha tha... Main ne aaj se pehle baji ko Itna pershan kabhi nahi dekha tha

Baji guo maguo ki halut m khadi apni ungliyan marod rahi thi... Baji kabhi kumre se baher dekhti to kabhi meri shukal dekhne lug jati... woh tazabzub ka shikar thi... saf puta chal raha tha keh woh mujh se baat kerna chahti hay liken fisla nahi ker pa rahi thi keh woh baat mujh se keray ya na keray

Baji k chehre per pershani k sath sath ik namalom sa dar bhi phela hova tha.... Mujhe shuk hova keh Koi khas baat hi hay jes ki waja se baji itni pershan hay

Main :baji... Kiya hova... itni pershan Keyon ho... Kia baat hay

Baji to Jesay mere hi pochnay ka intazar ker rahi thi... Baji ki ankhon se ansoo tip tip gerne lugay or baji hichkiyan le le ker rane lugi

Baji ko yon rota dekh ker main bhi pershan ho giya Keyon keh main ne aaj se pehle baji ko kabhi rate nahi dekha tha... ami abu ne kabhi bhi baji se sukht lehje m baat nahi ki thi... phir esi kiya baat thi keh baji yon ro rahi thi

Baji ko rota dekh ker mera bhi dil bethne luga or meri becheni bedhnay lugi. ..is se pehle keh main kuch bolta baji khud hi bol padi

Baji :shaboooooo... Main tumhen ik baat batati hoon pehle tum kasum khao keh kisi ko nahi batao ge... Ami abu ko bhi nahi
Main :baji... Main kasum khata hoon liken tum baat to batao
Baji :pehle tum mere ser per hath rukh ker kasum khao

Baji ne mera hath paked ker apne ser per rukh liya... Baji ki baat sun ker meri roh tuk kanp gai... ab mujhe bhi thodi sungini ka ahsas hova Keyon keh baji itni badi kasum mujhe isay hi nahi de rahi thi... zaror Koi khas baat hi thi

Main :baji main kasum khata hoon... Main kisi ko nahi bataon ga ab batao keh Baat kiya hay

Jab main ne kasum kha li to baji ko yaqeen ho giya keh main kisi ko nahi bataon ga... Itni deer m rone se baji k dil ka bojh bhi kuch hulka ho chuka tha or woh thodi pur sakoon nazer aane lugi
Kehtay hane keh kisi ko razdar buna lenay se dil ka bojh hulka ho jata hay... Shayed baji bhi is liye pur sakoon ho chuki thi keh woh apna razdar banane ka fisla ker chuki thi

Baji ne apna hath mere samne ker diya liken us k hath ki muthi bund thi
Baji ne apne hath ki muthi kholi to mujhe us m ik kaguz nazer aaya
Main ne istufhamiya nazron se baji ki terf dekha to us ne mujhe kaguz utha ker padhnay ka ishara Kiya

Main ne dheruktay dil k sath baji k hath se kaguz utha liya or jaldi se khol ker padhnay luga
Jesay hi main ne kaguz per likhi tehreer or us per likha name padha... Mera khon khol utha
Main ne ik nazer baji ki terf dekha or tez qadumo se kumre se baher Jane luga
Mera khon khol raha tha or guse k mare demag phut raha tha... Mere dil o demag m ik hi khiyal aa raha tha
maroon ga ya meron ga liken usay zinda nahi choron ga

Main abhi do char qadum hi chala tha keh baji ne mujhe peche se aa ker paked liya

Main khud ko zor luga ker baji se chorwane luga liken baji bhi kisi sherni ki terha mujh se chimut gai
Main ne ik do bar onchi awaz m kaha keh baji mujhe chor do to baji ne kaha keh Itna shor Keyon ker raha hay... Kiya sab ko bataye ga... tu ne meri kasum khai hay... Idher beth or pehle meri baat sun

Baji ki baat sun ker main beth to giya liken meri Jo halut thi... woh mera dil hi janta tha

Baji ki baat sun ker main beth to giya liken meri Jo halut thi... woh mera dil hi janta tha

Baji mere samne khadi ho gai or kumre se baher dekhtay howay mujhe sumjhane lugi or sari kahani batane lugi.... main chup chap beth ker gor se baji ki baat sunne luga

Baat kuch zeyada lumbi bhi nahi thi or na hi zeyada porani thi

Roz baji apni sahili k sath school jati thi... Pichlay do char dinon se baji ki sahili kisi waja se school nahi ja rahi thi... is liye baji akeli hi school aa ja rahi thi
Humare muhulay se ik pugdundi si kheton k bichon bich shaher ki terf ja rahi thi jo shaher Jane ka short cut thi
Pugdundi bahut hi bareek thi... Jes per ik hi admi chal sukta tha or aaj Kal pugdundi k azoo bazoo junter uga hova tha... Jo Itna bada or ghuna tha keh us m chalta hova admi ya aorut nazer nahi aata tha
Ye sari zamen khan ki thi liken kashtkari mozeray hi kertay thay or mozeray humari ik monh boli bova k betay thay jes k ghar humara aana jana luga rehta tha
humari us monh boli bova ka ik beta jes ka name Nasir tha...Jes ki umer 19,20 saal k lug bhug thi... Woh Ik number ka awara,nashi or badmash tha... woh do teen din se baji k raste m junter m chup ker khada ho raha tha... Pehle to us ne baji k raste m ik do khut phenkay Jo baji ne nahi uthay liken Kal jab baji school se wapus aa rahi thi to us ne aa ker baji ka hath paked liya or ik kaguz baji k hath m thuma ker chala giya... Baji us ki itni himmat dekh ker dar gai or kaguz le ker ghar chali aai jes m saf saf likha tha keh Kal school Jane se pehle mujh se junter m mil ker jana verna school se wapsi per main Jo kuch bhi tumhare sath keron ga us ki zemedar tum khud ho gi

Main ab Itna bucha bhi nahi raha tha.. Kaguz m chupi dhumki ko achi terha sumjh sukta tha.... 8 class ka student tha or sex se kafi hud tuk ashna ho chuka tha lihaza mujhe ye baat sumjhne m zeyada deer nahi lugi k Nasir ka irada kiya hay or woh baji k sath kiya kerna chahta hay

Baji ne mujh se kaha keh Nasir junter m khada mera intazar ker raha ho ga... tum us se ja ker bus Itna kaho keh meri baji ko tung kerna chor do verna abu ko buta doon ga... Is terha woh dar jaye ga or mujhe tung kerna chor de ga
liken ager abhi hum ne ami ya abu ko ye baat buta di to meri pedhai bund ho jaye gi or phir jhagra bhi ho jaye ga... Meri kham khah ki badnami bhi ho gi.... is liye pehle usay tum keh ker dekho ager man giya to thek verna ami abu ko buta deen ge

Baji ne mujhe sumjha bujha ker achi terha thunda kiya or bar bar kaha keh tum ne us se kisi bhi sorut m lerna nahi.... ager woh mujhe dobara tung keray ga to main khud abu ko buta doon gi... Baji ki baat meri sumjh m aa gai or main baji se ijazut le ker muhulay ki guliyon se guzerta hova kheton m puhnch giya

Jesay hi main ne junter k bich putli si pugdundi per chalna shoro kiya... Mera dil ghabrane luga liken main ne himmat na hari or aage hi aage badhne luga... Jesay hi main aadhay raste m puhncha... Mujhe ik admi kali chader m malbos nazer aaya... Qad kath dekhte hi main forun pehchan giya keh woh Nasir hay

Main Nasir se dus bara qadum door hi khada ho giya or such baat yeh thi keh usay dekh ker main or bhi zeyada dar giya

Nasir ne kali chader udh rukhi thi or mujhe bus us ki ankhen hi nazer aa rahi then jin m hulki hulki khon ki lali pheli hovi thi... woh door se hi mujhe khaternak nazer aa raha tha... Nasir ne bhi mujhe dekh liya or pocha

Nasir :tu yahan kiya ker raha hay
Main :ta... ta...tum meri bahen ko tung kerna chor do verna main abu ko bata doon ga

meri awaz bhari ho gai or main baat kertay howay huklane luga... meri ankh bhar aai or meri ankhon k samne dhund si chane lugi.... Main khud ko bahut chota or kumter mehsos kerne luga... Baat kerte kerte mera dil m hulki si ghutan hone lugi or meri tangen kanpne lugen... Main khud per bahut jaber ker k khada tha verna ger jata.. Kisi se request kerna keh meri bahen ka pecha chor do.. Kitna zalil kam hay ye tub mujhe andaza ho raha tha or Main begerti k mare sherm se marra ja raha tha

Jab ik insan ye soch le keh usay lerna nahi serf baat se hi muslay ka hul nikalna hay to woh lashori toor per buzdil bun jata hay or main bhi ghar se yahi soch ker nikla tha keh Nasir se lerna nahi serf baat kerni hay to khud ba khud mujh per bhi buzdali sawar ho gai thi 

Nasir :kiya ker le ga tera baap... ye dekh raha hay.... Main teray baap ko cheer phad doon ga

Nasir ne ik terung se kaha or apni chader khol di... Us k hath m ik khunjer ya chori thi... Jo subah k ujalay m chamak rahi thi...Jesay dekh ker main or bhi dar giya...
Nasir sharab k nushe m tha or pori teyari k sath baji ka intazar ker raha tha... ye to baji ki kismat achi thi keh us ne mujhe bhej diya ager woh Nasir ka ye roop dekh leti to dar k mare behosh ho jati...
Nasir bhi aaj kuch kerne ki niyat se hi khada tha or us k dil m kisi bhi baat ka dar ya khof nahi tha
Nasir mujh se baat kerta hova mere samne aa ker khada ho giya... Mere to Jesay qadumon m jaan hi nahi thi... Mujh se Itna bhi nahi hova keh Nasir se door chala jaon... Mera dil meri kanputiyon m dharak raha tha or mera pora jesm pasine se bhig chuka tha... Meri tangen kanp rahi then or main dum ba khud khada ankhen phad phad ker Nasir ko dekh raha tha Jo mere baap ko bhi marne ki dhumki de raha tha
Nasir :isay kia dekh raha hay... Chal bhag yahan se
Nasir ne mujhe dhuka diya to main junter m peth k bul ger giya
Itni beizti or zelut ka ahsas is pul se pehle mujhe kabhi nahi hova tha.. .. Mera dil khon k ansoo rone luga.. Dil ne kaha... Isay jine se behter hay mer ja...
Mera khon phir se khol utha... Meri soi hovi geerut jag gai ... Baji ka sab samjhana bojhana main bhol giya... gusa kiya hota hay yeh main ne us pul jana
Main kisi tofan ki terha utha or Nasir per toot pada
Sab se pehle main ne apne ser ki tuker Nasir k pait m mari... Nasir zera sa lerkheraya liken forun hi sanbhal giya
Us ne mujhe kudhon se paked liya or mujh per ghoson, laton ki barish ker di
Main bhi mar khaa raha tha liken Nasir ki tangon se chimta hova tha or usay peche ki terf dhakel raha tha
Ab to na hi mujhe Nasir k khunjer ka dar tha or na hi kisi or baat ka
Is dhuka muki m Nasir ka balance buger giya or woh peth k bul junter m ger giya jes ki waja se us ka gusa or badh giya
Main bhi forun Nasir k senay per sawar ho giya or vehshiyon ki terha us k monh per andha dhund muke bersanay luga
Nasir ne zor luga ker kerwat budli or main side m ger giya
Hum dono ne uthnay m deer nahi ki or phir se gothum gutha ho gaye
Nasir char mar raha tha to do main bhi mar raha tha
Junter ki fusal humara akhara buni hovi thi or hum usay rondtay pher rahe thay
Nasir mujhe mar raha tha liken mujhe derd ka ahsas nahi ho raha tha bulkeh ik geez o guzab se bhar por josh sa jesm m bharta ja raha tha
hum dono k qamez tar tar ho chuke thay keh Achank Nasir ki hath m ik lukdi aa gai or us ne mujhe petna shoro ker diya
Do teen lukdiyan us ne mere ser m maren to mere ser se khon behna shoro ho giya thodi hi deer m Mujhe chuker aane luge... Meri ankhon k samne andhera chane luga or mera jesm dhela padnay luga or main zammin per ger giya... Mujhe bus Itna ahsas ho raha tha keh Nasir mujhe mar raha hay... liken Nasir ki mar se meri ankh bar bar khul jati phir achank sakoon sa phel giya or Nasir ne mujhe marna bund ker diya
Main nem gushi k aalum m tha... Kuch deer bad kisi ki awaz mere kano m gonji... Main ne ankh khol ker dekha... woh humare muhulay ka dukan dar imran tha... Main ne phir se apni ankhen bund ker leen or so giya

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shabo the real man (part 1)
« on: November 11, 2015, 04:11:16 pm »

Offline Nazeershah

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #1 on: November 12, 2015, 01:25:23 am »


Shab the real man abhi running m hay or ab main ne  shabo the real man (part 1)bhi likhna shoro ker diya hay
Main koshesh keron ga keh meri ye kawish ap ko pasand aayee
Jo dost meri hosla afzai keren ge main un ka shikar guzar rahon ga

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #1 on: November 12, 2015, 01:25:23 am »

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #2 on: November 12, 2015, 04:01:35 am »
Shah ji bhot achi hy kawish ap ise zaroor pura krna
Kash ka muje se koi aisa gunnah ho
jise ki saza srif tum ho srif tum

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #3 on: November 12, 2015, 03:31:06 pm »
bahut khoob, pehli wali story bhi update karte rehna

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #4 on: November 12, 2015, 10:15:18 pm »


Main nem gushi k aalum m tha... Kuch deer bad kisi ki awaz mere kano m gonji... Main ne ankh khol ker dekha... woh humare muhulay ka dukan dar imran tha... Main ne usay dekh ker phir se apni ankhen bund ker leen or so giya

Liken imran mera bazoo paked ker mujhe uthane ki koshesh kerne luga to meri ankh pher se khul gai

Main kuch deer to khali khali nazron se imran ko dekhta raha phir aas pass nazer ghoma ker dekha to mujhe sari baat yad aa gai

Main abhi bhi junter m hi pada hova tha or imran mujhe Sahara de ker uthane ki koshesh ker raha tha liken mera ser bahut derd ker raha tha

Main ne apne hosh sumbhalay or apne derd per kaboo patay howay imran ki mudud se apne peeron per khada ho giya... ahesta ahesta meri halut sumbhalnay lugi or main apne peeron per chalne ki koshesh kerne luga

Imran ne bataya keh tumhare ser se khon beh raha hay or tumhen doctor k pass Jane ki zarorut hay

Main ne apne ser per hath pher ker dekha to mera hath apne hi khon se ter ho giya... Main apna khon dekh ker thoda pereshan ho giya or imran se bola

Main :Tum mera ik kam kero ge
Imran :kia kam hay.... Jaldi bolo
Main :Tum ja ker chacho Asif ko bola lao tub tuk main yahan beth ker intazar kerta hoon
Imran :liken ager Nasir wapus aa giya to
Main :jab aaye ga tub ki tub dekhi jaye gi... abhi mera ser derd se phuta ja raha hay... tum jaldi se jao
Imran :acha thek hay

Imran chala giya....main pugdundi per beth ker imran k lotne ka intazar kerne luga... Main idher udher bhi dekh raha tha keh kahin Nasir dobara na aa jaye... Mere pore jesm m hulka phulka derd tha liken woh qabil e berdasht tha

Idher udher nazer dodatay howay meri nazer Nasir k khunjer per padi Shayed dhuka muki m ye Nasir k hath se ger giya tha

Main ne ja ker khunjer utha liya or hath m paked ker beth giya... 10,15 ment m hi mujhe chacho pugdundi per bhagta hova apni terf aata hova nazer aaya... imran bhi us k peche peche bhag raha tha

chacho Jesay hi mere qareeb aaya... Nasir ka pochnay luga or us ki talash m idher udher nazer dodanay luga... Liken Nasir to kab ka bhag chuka tha

Chacho ne mere hath Nasir ka khunjer dekh ker pocha keh ye kahan se tumhare pass aaya to main be buta diya keh ye khunjer Nasir ka hay to chacho ne khunjer mujh se le ker imran ko de diya... Chacho ne imran se kaha ye khunjer filhal tum rukh lo... Main bad m tum se le loon ga
Phir chacho meri terf mutwaja hova or pochnay k sath sath dekhne bhi luga keh mujhe kahan kahan chot lugi hay
Chacho ne mere ser ka moena kiya or thoda pereshan ho giya or bola... Chalo doctor k pass chahtay hane
Chacho mujhe le ker kheton se baher chal pada.... woh bar bar sawal poch rahe thay keh Nasir se Keyon leda, Nasir ne tujhe Keyon mara, tu yahan kiya ker raha tha ya kiya kerne aaya tha...

Main chup chap Chacho ki baten sunta raha... hum kheton se baher nikal hi rahe thay keh Chacho zolfqar apni bike le ker aa gaye or badi feker mandi se mujhe uper se neche dekhtay howay mera hal ahwal pochnay luga

Chacho ne chacho zolfqar se kaha pehle isay doctor k pass le ker chalte hay... Baqi baten bad m hoti rahen gi
Chacho ne mujhe chacho zolfqar k peche bethaya or khud bhi mere peche mujhe paked ker beth gaye... Chacho zolfqar ne bike bhagai or 5,7 ment m hi hum hospital pahunch gaye

Chacho mujhe jaldi se doctor k pass le gaye... Phir doctor ka kam shoro ho giya... ser m 3 tankay luga ker us ne puti bandh di or kuch khane peenay ki dawayan bhi di deen liken itni deer m mera jesm kafi hud tuk aker chuka tha or derd bhi bahut ho raha tha

itne m chacho zolfqar abu ko le ker aa gaye jes k peche peche mamo or un k betay bhi aa gaye phir to Jesay line si lug gai... Jes ko bhi puta chal raha tha... wohi pochnay chala aa raha tha... Sab sawal ker rahe thay... ladai ki waja poch rahe thay liken main chup raha or kisi ki bhi baat ka Koi jawab na diya phir hum sub ghar aa gaye

Yahan ik naya hungama berpa tha... Jesay hi hum ghar k derwaze m puhnchay ander se shor ki awaz sun ker ruk gaye ...shor sun ker Saf puta chal raha tha keh bahut si aoruten ik sath bol rahi hane...

Chacho ne ik bar ander jhank ker dekha phir ruk giya... Phir chacho ne ik buche se kaha keh ander se poch ker aao perda to nahi hay or hum guli m khaday ho ker intazar kerne luge.. Itne m abu, chacho, mamo and party bhi aa gai
Mamo ne apni bethuk khulwa di or sub merdon k bethne ka intazam wahan ho giya

thodi deer bad derwaze m chachi Najma aa gai or mujh se liput ker rone lugi... Chachi ne mere ser per hath phertay howay mujhe chomnay shoro ker diya or mujh se pochnay lugi keh zeyada chot to nahi lugi
Main ne bhi chachi ko apni bahon m bhar liya or usay tusuli dene luga keh main thek hoon mujhe kuch nahi hova
Kuch deer ansoo bahanay k bad chachi sanbhal gai or chacho Asif se baten kerne lugi

us ne chacho Asif ko bataya keh Muhulay ki kafi aruten jama ho gai hane ... Bhabhi or Zara ka ro ro ker bura hal hay... Main shabo ko apne sath le ker ja rahi hoon Keyon jab tak is ki maa or bahen isay dekh nahi leen gi... Woh chup nahi hoon gi

Chacho Asif chala giya jabkeh chachi mujhe bazoo se paked ker ghar k ander le Jane lugi
Chachi meri right side m thodi peche ho ker chal rahi thi liken us ki chati meri path se tuch ho rahi thi .. Chachi ne apne right hath se mera right bazoo paked rukha tha or chachi ne apna lift hath meri path k peche se ghoma ker mere lift bazoo per rukha hova tha.. Chachi ka ik muma mere pehlo m chubh raha tha or chachi mujhe Sahara de ker ghar k ander le ja rahi thi liken us waqt mera demag in kherafati khiyalon se pak tha

Jesay hi hum ghar k sahan m dakhil howay... Sab aoruten mukhiyon ki terha humare ird gerd juma ho gaen or kuch to mujh se liput ker rone lugen jab keh kuch door door se hi chila chila ker mera hal ahwal poch rahi then

Is bhed m kuch sumjh nahi aa rahi thi keh kon mujh se liput ker ro raha hay or kon baat ker raha hay
Main is bhed m apni maa or baji ko dhond raha tha liken woh mujhe kahin nazer nahi aa rahi then
Yahan chachi Najma ne himmat dekhai or sab ko mujh se door kerne lugi
Thodi bhed kum hovi to mujhe ami aati hovi nazer aaen... woh bhi mujh se aa ker liput gaen or phot phot ker rone lugen

Chachi ami ko delasa de rahi thi or sumjha rahi thi keh kuch nahi hova shabo ko... thek thak hay bus thodi si hi chot lugi hay Jo do char din m bhar jaye gi... Ami bhi kuch deer rone k bad sumbhal gaen or mere chehre per hath phertay howay meri balaen letay howay mera metha chomnay lugen

Abhi ami mera matha chom rahi then keh baji bhi aa ker mujh se liput gai or woh bhi badi mushkil se chup hovi
Chachi sab ko azoo bazoo ker k mujhe kumre m le gai or ik charpai per bester luga ker mere sone ki jagah banane lugen
Main charpai se tangen lutka ker beth giya... Meri qamez phut gai thi or khon se bhi bhar gai thi... Bunyan ka bhi qamez se milta julta hal tha

Ami ne kaha keh pehle kapre badul le phir so jana... Baji ne kapre diye to main uth ker bathroom Jane luga to chachi na kaha keh tu yahin budal le.. hum sub baher chale jate hane
Main ne kapre budal liye to sab wapus aa gaye...main charpai per lete giya to ami ik chader le ker aai Jo main ne apne senay tuk udh li...
Mera pora jesm derd ker raha tha or ser derd se phuta ja raha tha... main kuch deer aaram chahta tha liken kumre m bahut se aurten jama then or bari bari mera hal ahwal poch rahi then
Itne m bhabhi chai le ker aa gai..or sab ko serv kerne lugi... Phir woh mujh se aa ker mera hal ahwal pochnay lugi to main ne buta diya keh mera pora jesm derd ker raha hay or ahesta ahesta akerta ja raha hay..

Bhabhi charpai per cherh ker meri tangon k pass beth gai or hulke hulke hathon se meri tangen dabanay lugi
Bhabhi ki dekha dekhi chachi bhi meri tangen dabanay lugi to mujhe thodi rahut ka ahsas hova... un dono k nerm o molaim hathon k lumus ka ahsas mujhe bahut acha lug raha tha or main unhen badi shuker guzar nazron se dekh raha tha

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #5 on: November 13, 2015, 06:55:31 am »
bhai ye story 1st story se aage ki story hai kya ?
Mujhay achchha laga ki shabo bada ho gaya hai.
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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #6 on: November 13, 2015, 06:55:54 am »
waiting for next update.
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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #7 on: November 13, 2015, 09:24:57 pm »
ab update kab ayega?
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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #8 on: November 13, 2015, 10:18:47 pm »
very good shah g well done keep it up cha gay o

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #9 on: November 14, 2015, 12:43:18 am »


Brajesh Singh ap ka khiyal thek hay keh Ye aage ki hi kahani hay
Main waqtan fawaqtan is ki bhi update kerta rahon ga

Thanks for comments

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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #10 on: November 14, 2015, 06:45:08 am »
Is story ki update kab tak aayegi ?
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Re: shabo the real man (part 1)
« Reply #11 on: November 14, 2015, 01:58:55 pm »
Great start but do not ignore your first story


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