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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #8 on: April 19, 2017, 08:11:59 am »
ghar pahuchne ke bad mai yehi sochta rha ki kya karu or kya na fir maine agle din use usi park me le gaya

or usko i love u 2 bola wo khusi ke mare mere gale lag gayi

aise hi hamara pyar ka rishta chalta raha fir wo din v aa gaya jab mujhe usse dur hona pada
hua ye ki usko uske mama ke ghar jana pada
or jab wo wapas aayi to mere liye us din ki tahar or koi kala din na tha

wo jab aayi to mai college gaya tha
jab mai college se aya to use dekh kar meri khusi ka thikana na raha
lekin ye khusi pal do pal ke the
jaise hi maine use gale lagana chaha usne mujhe dhaka diya mujhe samajh me nhi aaya ki hua kya hai
jab mai dobara gale lagane pahucha to usne mujhe roka or boli khabar dar jo mere pass aaye
ye sun mere pairo tale jamin hi nikal gayi usdin ke bad mai hamesa kosis karta rha ki usse bat karu magar usne mujhe kabhi moka hi nhi diya or isi tarah din nikalta raha

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« Reply #8 on: April 19, 2017, 08:11:59 am »

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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #9 on: April 19, 2017, 08:24:27 am »
isi tarah din bitate gaye mujhe pata v na chala ki aakhi meri galti kya hai

fir maine police ka form apply kiya or usme mera selection ho gaya

mai roj nuri ko call karta taki usse bat ho sake lekin koi fayda nhi hota
fir ekbar 1 mahine ki chuti par aya to pata chala ki nuri ki sadi hone wali hai
mai to ye sun ke ek barf ke khambe ki tarah jam gaya tha
mujhe vishwash nhi ho rha tha ki aisa bhi kymuchh ho shakta hai

or mai rat bhar yehi sochta emraha ki akhir meri galti kya hai jo mujhe aisi saja mili
or mai rat bhar rota rha
ye mera routin ban gaya tha roj rat ko rona din me normal hone ka jhuta dikhawa karna

aise hi meri jindgi ki rani mujhse dur ho gayi or mai wapas apne job ke liye ghar se nikal gaya apne police station me

yehi thi meri pyar ki dastan


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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #10 on: April 19, 2017, 08:29:57 am »
ye thi meri first expreance

thoda short me likha hu lekin kya karu uss ghatna ko sochta hu to mai pagal ho jata hu isliye short me hi likha hai
waise v mai koi profecnal writer nhi hu so jo galti hue hai uske liye i m sorry
thanks

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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #11 on: April 19, 2017, 12:01:30 pm »
bohat achi koshish hai


aese hi mazeed kahaniyaan likhney ki koshish karo,


haan agar kahani k har 1 pehlo ko bohat tafseel se likho gaye to aap bohat ache writer ban saktey hain. ye just mera khiyaal hai. waise aap ne achi kahani likhi hai.


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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #12 on: April 19, 2017, 12:12:43 pm »
thanks sm bro
pehli bar likha tha na to aise hi sab kuchh short me likha hai

age puri koshish karunga ke details me likh saku

thank u so much sm

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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #13 on: April 23, 2017, 02:38:19 pm »
nice story if you do more work at this story, then it's got a huge numbers of comments and likes.
any ways excellent story dear loveboy :-*

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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #14 on: April 23, 2017, 02:38:51 pm »
bohat achi koshish hai


aese hi mazeed kahaniyaan likhney ki koshish karo,


haan agar kahani k har 1 pehlo ko bohat tafseel se likho gaye to aap bohat ache writer ban saktey hain. ye just mera khiyaal hai. waise aap ne achi kahani likhi hai.


is koshish k liye mein aap ko rep+1 deta hoon...
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Re: Dard-E-Mohabat
« Reply #15 on: April 23, 2017, 07:24:12 pm »
Thank u so much dear maryam

 

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