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Your Opinion on Story (سوتیلی ماں )
« on: November 04, 2019, 10:01:32 pm »
hi guys,


this topic is abut story
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writer ko daad o tehseen aap log  us ki story par comment kar ke dete hen ,

to is topic ka maqsaad dad o tehseen ke sath sath ye hai ke short comments ke alava aap writer ko aapni mukamal or tafseeli raye se agaah karen .


masalaan aap is main writer ko bata sakty hen ke kisi ki jaga us se galati hoi he ,
aap un ko bata satky hen ke puri story main kon si update sab se la jawab thi
story ke kon kon se sceen aap ke fev they or kon se sceen ap ko itny ziyada mazedar na lagey.
story ki kiya khas bat thi , etc etc .

i hope aap log is ko samjh rahey hon gey .
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Your Opinion on Story (سوتیلی ماں )
« on: November 04, 2019, 10:01:32 pm »

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Re: Your Opinion on Story (سوتیلی ماں )
« Reply #1 on: November 04, 2019, 11:26:55 pm »
ok mera tabsira ,

is story ka start bilkul bhi munasib mehsos naheen hoa . kafi kuch is main unrealistic tha .

shuroo ki story main kafi sari chezen bilkul bhi set naheen then .

is main sab se pehli chez  jo bi ki jaga lesbian ki tarafa jhukaao to shuroo main voh end main aker  utna jandaar nahen raha shurro main or bad main jab voh chez stright sex ki taraf aai us waqat voh cheez kafi pechey chali gai jab ke story ke start main females were only intrested in females .

chacha jaan ka aik din achanak se hardness wapas ajana ya keh len na mardi se mardangi ki taraf ajana un natural tha ,  na ye logically sensible he or na hi medically .


buraiaan or galatiaan jo mere jisaab se puri hoin ?

now come to positive side .

writer ney apny aap ko apni writing skills ko or story ko bohat fast improve kia or bohat jaldi voh story main intrested ke pehloo paida karty gaye ......  baad main mukalma nigari or sex sceen bohat improved they and i really enjoy it . or keh len half ke bad story us level par chali gai jahan hum is ko best stories main se aik keh sakty hen .


to my thumbs up to writer , it was really a good try and you did best job :)

keep up the good work  :tt1:
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Re: Your Opinion on Story (سوتیلی ماں )
« Reply #1 on: November 04, 2019, 11:26:55 pm »

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Re: Your Opinion on Story (سوتیلی ماں )
« Reply #2 on: January 23, 2020, 09:37:05 pm »
ye story mien nay 2 bar read ki hay, iss ki khass baat iss mein Lesbian Factor hay. jo acha bhi LaGa or kahien unreaListic bhi tha. MubaLiGa aarai ziyada thi. Story ko Khaincha bhi Gya. Lekin Readers attach rahy or aik munasib end dikhaya Gya. RaheeLa Mumtaz ki achi Kawish thi.
Kiya Kiya na khwab Hijer k mosum mien kho Gaye
Hum jaaG tu rahy thay maGer bakhat so Gayee

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Re: Your Opinion on Story (سوتیلی ماں )
« Reply #3 on: February 03, 2020, 01:31:49 am »
It was really good one
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Re: Your Opinion on Story (سوتیلی ماں )
« Reply #4 on: July 04, 2020, 04:32:37 am »
Bhai mujhay tou bilkul he farigh story lagi ye raheela behtreen writer hy but ye story iski bilkul dabba thi khin bhi reality feel nahi hoi story may zaburdasti ki khechi gai story ...
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